25 seconds of courage, that’s all I need
Why am I like this? It’s not as bad as I think
1, I can’t do this, my feet slow their speed.
I’ll change my mind, I’m already at the brink
2, What if they judge me? , I’ll stutter or shake
I know I can do this but still I quake.
3, I’ll be fine, but if I fail...
Not him, but his friends that make me go pale
4, I’m still moving forward, I should be proud,
Look at me! I’m halfway through the crowd,
5, This’ll be easy, he’ll talk to me and I’ll talk to him,
I’ll make him laugh and he’ll make me grin.
6, A fourth of my time is over by the time I’ve arrived,
He says “Hey”, so far I’ve survived
7, 8, I open my mouth, ready to reply,
But I know people are watching, Dang it! I’m too shy
9, 10, 11, 12 Here I go, I’m talking,
Once I start it’s as easy as walking,
13, 14, 15, 16, He starts to laugh then talks a bit,
My chest pounds, but I think I’m gonna make it
17, 18, 19, 20, I can’t believe I was ever afraid,
As I listen to him, the surroundings begin to fade.
21, 22, 23, 24, Conversation’s over, I think it was a success.
Now I’m sure he won’t like me less.
25, I turn around and start to walk away,
I’m so glad I did this. He’s the best part of my day.
Alright I hope that wasn’t too cheesy.... but I tried ok? Anyway
in this poem used end rhyme with the rhyme scheme starting out as an ABAB but
then turned into a CCDDEEFF and so on for the rest of the poem. I tried to have
an anaphora of the words ‘I’ and ‘he’ but I don’t know if it’s as obvious as I intended.
The diction of a lot of the words in this poem was to make it sound like the
thoughts of this girl.
This is so good! I really enjoyed reading this. It was so interesting and so powerful. I love how you included the numbers at the beginning of each line!
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ReplyDeleteHow long did this take? Rhyming isn't as easy as poets make it look. It's an impressive poem and I like the the subject. Very nice!
Emelia this is such a great poem! It kept me interested the whole time! I love how this is probably true too(; Really great job girl!
ReplyDeleteThat was a great poem it was not too cheesy it was fine.
ReplyDeleteI really like how the numbers were on every line. It is hard to get lost when reading it because it keeps you focused the whole time.
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